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I am writing you today to bring to surface a few complaints that I have. First offlet me start by saying that Moore Hall is a lovely place to live. I have indeed enjoyed my time here so far. While living here is nice there are a few things that I would like to bring to your attention. First, I would like to address the fact that we ran out of toilet paper in the 6e floor, which you probably already know is a girl floor. Ws are girls and we need toilet paper all the time. Living in a high rise where we share a bathroom with the rest of the hall, we shouldn't have to worry ebout running out of toilet paper. Whether the dispensers are always filled or there are always rolls somewhere just in case,.we should never run out of toilet paper. I think it would be a good idea if there wa@nrr#6i$f supply closet somewhere so if we did run out of toilet paper in the stalls we would know where to find some.

it is beyond freezing in the dorm rooms. It feels like it is Antarctica in these rooms. I can't go five minutes in my dorm without shivering, even if I have long sleeves and long pants on. Now don't get me wrong, I don't want the thermostat to but turned up to 85 degrees. I just would like for it to be turned up one or two degrees so it is still cool but not freezing. It would be nice to be able to come into my room where it is at a relaxing@ Second,

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Lastly, the elevators in the building are completely unpredictable. Let's start with the fact that one of the elevators goes to even floors only. It is pretty inconvenient for those who need to get to an odd floor. Also, one of them is consta[tly eettiug stuck on different floors. It is really inconvenient when only one elevatorX*rffiuffis a lot of traffic and overly stuffed elevators. Another thing is that one of the elevators alarms are constantly going offmultiple times a day. We shouldn't have to hit the panel of the elevator in a certain spot just to get the alarm to go off. What if we don't get it offsoon enough and the emergency responder is asking us what our emergency is? What if there is a real emerg0ncy where we need to call and they don't answer thiaking it's just on the fritz again? I think it would be a good idea to renovate these elevators over one sunmer whilE there is no one

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I hope you take all my complaints seriously. These are very cotnmor complaints and I am not the only one who complains about them. I hope that you take into con$ideration all of my suggestions to fixing these problems. Fixiag these problems would benefit almost everyone living in Moore Hall and it would make our time here that much better. I hope you have a lovely day.

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First, I would like to address the fact that we ran out of toilet paper in the 6e floor, which you probably already know is a girl floor. We are girls and we need toilet paper all the time. Living in a high rise where we share a bathroom with the rest of the hall, we shouldn't have to worry about running out of toilet paper. Whether the dispensers are always filled or there are always rolls somewhere just in cass, we should never run out of toilet paper. I think it would be a good idoa if there was a some sort of supply closet somewhere so if we did run out of toilet paper in the stalls we would know where to find some.

it is beyond freezing in the dorm rooms. It feels like it is Antarctica in these rooms. I can't go five minutes in my dorm without shivering, even if I have long sleeves and long pants if frnn\\l$ o1[{ow don't gâ‚Źt me wrong, I don't want the thermostat to hut turned up to 85 degrees. I j*", :ihq' \0i\t01\1( * would like for it to be turned up one or two degrees so it is still cool but not freezingf It would ' ' be nice to be ablo to come into my room where it is at a relaxing, not too hot or cold, Second,

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