Headline: At the Vatican, President Eyring Advocates for a Renaissance of Marriage Kicker: Husbands and wives have the ability to create lasting happiness in their lives and the lives of their families. On November 18, 2014, President Henry B. Eyring of the Quorum of the Twelve Apostles challenged the current world view of marriage in the following address at the Complementarity of Man and Woman International Interreligious Colloquium at Vatican City. HIn this address, he states that a married man and woman have “a transcendent power” to create lasting happiness for their whole family. To make this point, he describes seeing his wife, for the first time and telling himself that he would do anything to marry her. One year later, they were sealed to be husband and wife for time and all eternity.
Commented [NCC1]: We have decided to include the biography of living officials in the church. Here is the link to embed. https://www.lds.org/prophets-and-apostles/whatare-prophets/bio/henry-b-eyring?lang=eng
Throughout their fifty-two years of marriage, President Eyring has noticed this transcendent power as that he has become a a more loving person because of his love for his wife. In turn, her role as a mother and a nurturer has helped him in his role as a provider for the family. Their differences bindsound them together and makesde them a happier couple.
Commented [NCC4]: You follow by referencing the conference but not the actual address title so I would insert an appositive here, e.g. “. . . following address, hyperlinked article, . . .”
In contrast, the source of unhappiness for many marriages is selfishness. When couples are unselflessish, their differences complement each other and help their marriages to be happy, loving, and lasting. Therefore, President Eyring calls for a “renaissance of successful marriages and family life” by leading people to a religious faith that can help society return to a higher morality andor past familial values As “The Family: A Proclamation to the World” states, “A husband and wife have a solemn responsibility to love and care for each other and their children.” If society can follow this principle, then within a few generations, happiness and peace will increase throughout God’s worldwide family. You can read President Eyring’s full speech, “To Become as One,” here. —Shane Peterson, Mormon Insights
Commented [NCC2]: Commented [NCC3R2]: I’m including a reference to his position because we decided as a staff that a quick reference point would be more thorough.
Commented [NCC5]: Your tone and transitions are rather academic sounding. Brother Gardner has said that we are writing like we are talking to our little sister or a good friend, so maybe revise for less formality while maintaining your professionalism. Commented [NCC6]: “Therefore” and “In contrast” are slightly more academic transitions. They definitely work though.
Commented [NCC7]: This feels like a very definitive wrap up. Try infusing this last paragraph with the feeling that Pres. Eyring has more to say that we simply can’t cover here. It’s good to close the summary, but try not to close the discussion.