ENGLISH WORKBOOK 3–7 ANSWERS Writing: practice paper Page 74
LEVEL 3
(high)
Dear governers, I think the money should be spent on Astroturf and lighting so we can play football all year round and in the dark as well. This would be good for the school because it would mean we weren’t recking the grass when we aren’t meant to and it would also be better for people to watch because they could have seating and it can be floodlit and that would be great to watch. This might even make more money for the school because we could let clubs and local people use the Astroturf at the weekends and charge them money for it So all round this would be good for the school. We’d also get better at football and would win all the competitions so everyone would know we were the best and that would also be good for the school. Wouldn’t you like us to be on the front page of the paper as the winners? The other ideas are silly. I hope you do my idea, Yours sincerely, Peter Cutler Year 9 Football Captain Ps we could always wear shirts with this Liz Days name on them. This is level 3 because: Sentence structure and punctuation • Sentences out of control e.g. the second paragraph is all one sentence without any punctuation. This means the ideas aren’t presented in a way that can be clearly understood. • Some simple connectives used, but these let sentences run on. It’s good to use the connectives such as ‘and’ and ‘because’ but these are used when full stops are what’s really needed. • Simple opinion presented. Adding the comment, ‘The other ideas are silly’ makes the response itself seem silly. Text structure and organisation • Clear, straightforward structure. There are paragraphs, which helps the reader to follow the argument. • Some development of ideas. Some reasons are given, such as ‘This might even make more money for the school’ – if these were extended and developed this would be even better. • Some evidence presented. However, once again more is required. Composition and effect • Main areas covered, but the letter could be more imaginative and provide more ideas. • Good use of rhetorical question ‘Wouldn’t you like us to be on the front page of the paper as the winners?’. This is really effective as it is just the sort of thing the Governors would be interested in.
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