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Emily

Responsible,Kind,Caring

DaughterofOlegandRita,SisterofEstelle,Nathan,andJacob

Lovespainting,reading,andshopping

Hatemesses,andpickles,andgreatbookswithterribleendings

Fearedthedark,andfearsoceans,andheights

AccomplishedpassingAPclasses,andgettinggoodgrades

WouldliketoseeGreeceonedayandbecomealawyer

LivedinSuffield,ConnecticutmovedtoGranby,Connecticut

Ivanov

Where I am From Poem (Brainstorm)

Where I'm From Poem

● Whatdevicesdidyoutryw/cited/labeledexamplesfromyourtext

Itriedtouserepetition,imagery,andpersonification AnexampleofrepetitionwaswhenIreiteratecleaningsuppliesorfamilyandthetown

● First,lookbackoveryourdrafts Selectandhighlightatleastthreespecificmeaningful&intentionalchanges&revisionsyoumade Considerwhyyoumadethesechangesandwhatyourrevisionsdidtoimproveyourpieceasawholeforyouraudience Now,reflect: Whatchangesdidyoumaketoyourwritingthroughtherevisionprocess?Discussatleast3-4 specificchangesyoumade Referto specificrevisionsfromonedrafttoanother Whatdidyouchange?Why?

Imademajorityofmydecisionsinorderforthepoemtoflowmuchbetter,Idecidedtoendthepoeminmyfinalwith“IamfromOlegandRita” ThisrepetitionishighlightingthefactthatmyparentschangedsomuchofwhoIamthatsayingitinthebeginningandendwrapsthewholething together ANotherrevisionthatImadewasreorganizingmysentencessothatitcanbesomewhatchronologicalandnotpatchy Ialsochanged WhereintheworldIamfromtothetopofthepoemasopposedtothebottomofitbecausealotofwhoIamisfromwhereIgrewup.

● Howdidyourrevisionsimpactyourpieceasawhole?

ItmadeitsoitcanflowbetterandoverallpiecetogetherwhoIamasaperson

● Whatdidyoulearn/enjoy/findchallenging/surprising,etc aboutengaginginthispieceofwriting?

Ilearnedthatsometimestrialanderroristhebestwaytogetthebestresults

● Whathaveyoulearnedaboutyourselfasawriter/yourwritingprocess?

IlearnedthatIneedtostopandthinkaboutwhatIamwritingaboutandmakeintellectualrhetoricalchoicesinorderforthereadertogetthe samepointIamtryingtomake

● Whatwashelpfultoyouasawriterduringthisprocess?Bespecific

Theroughdraftsandgroupingtogethersections.Sections-like-thetownandfamilyandroutinesthatmakeupwhoIamasaperson.

● Whatgrowthorlearningasawritercanbefoundinyourworkhere?Bespecific

ThechronologicalorderthatIputmywritinginandtherhetoricalchivesthatImadepurposefully

● Whatissomethingspecificyoustillwouldliketoimproveuponasawriter?

Writinglongerandhavingmoreideasflow,Ifeellikeattimesitishardformetobrainstormorhaveanyideas

I'mfromlysolandbleach

I'mfromthebeacheverysummerandbaba'shouseeverythanksgiving

I'mfrom“saturdaysareforcleaning”and“organizationiskey”

I'mfromsleepinginonsaturdaysandwakingupearlyonsundaysforchurch

I'mfromgardeninginthespringandrakingleavesinthefall

I'mfromolegandrita

Fromstrongloveanddevotion

Fromhonestyandtrust

I'mfromGranby

Farmsoneveryroadandfieldsoneverystreet

Iamfromallofthesepeopleplacesandthings

Draft2

I'mfromlysolandbleach

Fromsweepersandmops

I'mfromthebeacheverysummerandhotchocolateeverywinter

I'mfrombaba'shouseeverythanksgiving

Fromopeningchristmaspresentsonchristmaseve

Frommymothersblueeyesandblondehair

Frommyfathersstubbornpersonalityandattitude

Iamfrommyrollerbladesbutbeforethatiwasfromscrapesandbruisesonbicycles

I'mfromweekendgetawaysandlastminuteplanning

I'mfrom“saturdaysareforcleaning”and“organizationiskey”

I'mfromsleepinginonsaturdaysandwakingupearlyonsundaysforchurch

I'mfromgardeninginthespringandrakingleavesinthefall

I'mfromolegandrita

Fromstrongloveanddevotion

Fromhonestyandtrust

I'mfromGranby

Farmsoneveryroadandfieldsoneverystreet

Iamfromallofthesepeopleplacesandthings

I'mfromGranbyConnecticut

Farmsoneveryroadandfieldsoneverystreet

Iamfromallofthesepeopleplacesandthings

Imfrommyfamilytree

Fromolegandrita

Frommymothersblueeyesandblondehair

Frommyfathersstubbornpersonalityandattitude

I'mfromlysolandbleach

Fromsweepersandmops

I'mfromthebeacheverysummerandhotchocolateeverywinter

I'mfrombaba'shouseeverythanksgiving

Fromopeningchristmaspresentsonchristmaseve

Iamfrommyrollerbladesbutbeforethatiwasfromscrapesandbruisesonbicycles

I'mfromweekendgetawaysandlastminuteplanning

I'mfromcampinginWashingtonstateevery2yearswheremountainsstandtalllikepeoplesurroundingus

I'mfrom“saturdaysareforcleaning”and“organizationiskey”

I'mfromsleepinginonsaturdaysandwakingupearlyonsundaysforchurch

I'mfromgardeninginthespringandrakingleavesinthefall

Fromstrongloveanddevotion

Fromhonestyandtrust

Fromcommunityandfamilyfirst

I'mfromcloudsandgrassandthesmellofroses

I'mfromGranbyConnecticut

I'mfromOlegandRita

Letters to Self

AssessingMyfirstRA

Iwouldgivemyselfa2.IwouldsaythatthereisalotofroomforimprovementbecauseIwas stilladjusting.IthinkIdidabadjobandIamnotafraidtosaythatIdeserveabadgradebecause IknowIdo.

Lettertoself

Emily,

Firstofallstopstressingoverthisandgoslowthistime,actuallyuseallthetimeoutlinedfor readingtoreadandnottojusthopintothewriting,trytoreadthetextovermultipletimestonot missanything,alsodonotnamedropandtrytoputtogethercoherentsentencesandstop repeatingyourself.UsePODandSPACECATtheywillhelpyoutobetteruselanguagethatis technicalandeasytounderstand.Doyourbestinthetimeprovided.

AlsoIthinkthatyoushouldkeeprevisitingthearticlethatisbeingworkedonbecausewhenyou continuetorevisitthesamepiecethenyouwillslowlypickuponmorethingsthatyoucanuse inyourRA.Rememberthatinordertodowellavoidtermdroppingandgoslowtomakesure youarenotconstantlyrepeatingyourself.

In1780,rightbeforetherevolutionarywar,AbigailAdamswrotealettertohersonJohn QuincyAdamsabouthisvoyagetoFrancewhichisAmerica'sally.Shewrotethisbecauseshe wastheonewhodecidedforhimtogoonthisjourney WhenwritingthisletterAbigailistrying toencourageandprovetohersonthatthevoyagewillbegoodforhimanditwastheright decisiontomake.Hergoalistoprovethatshemadethecorrectdecisionforhimtogoonthis journeyinordertoproveherpointAbigailevokesrhetoricaldevicesandstrategiessuchaslogic andreason,pronounuseandauthority.

Inthebeginningofherlettershestartsoffbysaying“mydearson”puttingthe“my”at thebeginningofthatsetsthetoneoftherestoftheletter.Itisobviousthatshehasalotoflove andrespectforhersonandthatisthereasonwhyshewritesthisletterinthefirstplaceandthat's alsowhyshestartsoffwitha.Shecaresforhersonandyoucanseethatintheletteranditis assumedthatshehadforcedorrecommendedheavilyforhimtogoonthistripwhenshesays“If Ihadthoughtyourreluctancearosefromproperdeliberationorthatyouwerecapableofjudging whatwasmostforyourownbenefit,Ishouldnothaveurgedyoutoaccompanyyourfatherand brother”WhenAbigailsaysthissheissettingauthoritysheisshowingthatsheisconfidentin hisabilitythereandsheisconfidentthatitwastherightchoiceeventhoughJohnmynothave thoughtthatandwasopposingtheidea.Sheisalsoshowingthatsheknowshimverywelland wellenoughtoknowthatthiswillbegoodforhim.Thisiswhatcompelledhertowritethis,her confidencethatshemadethecorrectdecision.

LaterAbigailpresentsanallusioninordertoshowanddefendherpointwhensheutilizes theexampleofCicero,sheisshowingthatthisonemanwhowentthroughsomanydifferent thingsandstrugglessurvivedandbloomedfromthosecircumstancesshowinghersonthathetoo canmakethebestfromabadsituation.Abigailalsosaysthatthebestmindsareformedbecause ofdifficultiesandthatiswherewisdomcomesfrom.Sheprovidesthisexampletoshowthat eventhoughhersonmighthavetodealwithdifficultiesitwillonlymakehimastrongerperson.

Abigailalsosupportswordchoiceinherlastsentencegoingbacktothebeginningwhereshe used“mydearson”asawayofshowinglove,inthelastsentenceshesays“yourever affectionatemother”thisisjustwrappingupwiththesamethingthatshestartedwith.

Abigaildemonstratesallofthesestrategiestoconveyherpointandmaingoalwhichis provingtohersonthatshemadethecorrectchoiceforhim.Intheendshecallshimtoactionby sayingtomakehisparentsproud(herself)andtodohonortoyourcountry(America).Sheused thissentencetotieupthelettersothathecanbebroughtbacktoherpoint.

EmilyIvanov RA#3Final

OnFebruary27,2013,duringhispresidencyBarackObama,deliveredthisspeech. becauseofthededicationoftheRosaParksstatueintheNationalStatuaryHalloftheUScapitol building.RosaParkswasanextremelyinfluentialfigureinhistoryandthecivilrights movement.BarackObamautilizesrhetoricaldevicessuchasbiblicalallusions,emotional appeals,andtone.

Inthefirstparagraph,BarackObamastartswitharespectfulandprofessionaltonewhile offeringanemotionalappealbytalkingaboutRosaParks.RosaParks,whoheldnopresidential officeandwhohadnospecialtitlestillmadeanenormousdifferenceintheworldandplayeda largepartinaboycottthatlaterledtoawholecivilrightsmovement.Thisisreachingouttothe audiencehereandshowingthatyoudonotneedtobepresidentorhaveanyspecialnameto becomesomethinggreatandchangetheworld.BaracktheninformsthereaderaboutwhoRosa Parkswas,andwhatshehad.Shehadcourageandbraverybutwasalsostrong-willedand stubbornandBarackObamarepeatedthismultipletimesutilizingrepetitionwhensaying “NobodyeverbossedRosaaroundandgotawaywithit”and“Rosawouldnotbepushed”and thenlaterstatingagain“shewouldnotbepushed”.TheseareexamplesofObamausing repetitiontoprovehispointthatRosawasaverystrongindividual,especiallyinherbeliefs.

BarackObamaalsousesbiblicalappealstoprovehispoint,oneexampleofthisiswhen hesaid“liketheancientwallsofJericho,begantoslowlycomedown”thisisreferringtothe storyinthebiblewhentheIsraeliteswalkedaroundJerichoandhadfaiththatwhentheyblew

theirtrumpetsthewallswouldfall.InsteadoffightingthepeopleofJerichotogainthatlandthey putfaithinGodandwalkedaroundthecityuntilitfell.SimilarlytothatwhenRosaParksnever resortedtoviolenceandputherfaithinthepeopleandjustlikethatwithouttakinganyspecific actionwithviolenceinvolvedtheywatchedasthewallsbegantocrumble.Omoba(thespeaker) hasavastamountofrespectforRosaParksforstartingthisboycottandspeakingupagainst inequality.WhenBarackObamasaid“strivingeachdaytorightsomewrongsomewhereinthis world''heisusinganemotionalappealcreatingthelistenerstothinkabouthowRosaParkswas doinglittlemundanetasksandstillcouldchangetheworld.

RosaParkswasoneofthemostinfluentialpeopleinthehistoryofthecivilrights movement,andit'sobviousthatBarackObamahasalotofprideinRosaParks'sbravery.Healso makesitveryclearthatRosahadnopreviousplatformandwasnotsometypeofinfluencein societyatthattimebutyetdecadeslatersheisbeingspokenaboutbecauseoftheimpactsshe hasmadeontheworld.Intheend,Thespeakeruseshisrhetoricalchoicestoshowthelisteners thatyoudon'tneedanythinginparticulartochangetheworldandthatyoustartwiththelittle thingsthatneededtobedonetohelpasRosadid.

Rhetorical Precis Fahrenheit 451

“Fahrenheit451”,RayBradburyarguesandillustratesthatthisworldwouldbelonely, devastatinglydull,andmeaningless,withoutbooksandliterature,heillustratesaworldwithall theirfocusonelectronics.BradburyprovesthisbytheinstantwhenGuy'swifesitsandwatches theTVallday,Hiswifedoesnotcraveknowledge,andcontinuestobefullyimmersedinthe worldthatelectronicsproducedforher,it'sevidentthatshefeelsmeaninglesswhenshetalks aboutherspeedingproblems.BradburywritesaboutGuy'swifeinordertoshowthedangersof livingsoattachedtotechnology.Bradburydirectedthistowardthepeoplearoundhimwhenhe releasedthisbookwhentheTVfirstcameoutandhestartedtopredictjusthowmuchpeople willbeinfusedbytheelectronics.

Response to Text Fahrenheit 451

Ipersonallyfoundthisbookhorrifying.Thefactthatasocietycouldbesocutofffrompersonal experiencesandpurelyjustrelyingonelectronicsandtechnologywasunfathomabletome.For theirwholelifetheyreliedonnonewexperiencesandinsteadlivedthroughthescreenthey watcheddayandnight, butslowlyandsurelyasIkeptreadingthebookIrealizedjusthow similaroursocietytodayistothesocietyinFahrenheit451.It'sevidentthatintoday'ssocietythe waythatteenagerscommunicatewitheachotherisnotactuallyinpersonanymore.Theyare havingconversationswithsomeoneoveraphoneandoversnapchatinsteadofactuallymeeting someonethroughpeopleyoumeetbyaddingthemasafriendonsocialmedia.Thesocietythat weliveintodayissogreatlysimilarthatitscaredmeevenmorebecausewhatifthatwas possibleforourworldtobecomeexactlylikethat.Ifoundmyselfrelatingtosomeofthethings hesaidofIfoundmyselfquestioningmyselfaquotethatmademethingwas“Andinherears thelittleSeashells,thethimbleradiostampedtight,andanelectronicoceanofsound,ofmusic andtalkandmusicandtalkcomingin,cominginontheshoreofherunsleepingmind.Theroom wasindeedempty.Everynightthewavescameinandboreheroffontheirgreattidesofsound, floatingher,wide-eyed,towardmorning.Therehadbeennonightinthelasttwoyearsthat Mildredhadnotswumthatsea,hadnotgladlygonedowninitforthethirdtime.”Thisreally mademestepbackandthinkbecauseIconstantlyhaveearbudsinmyears.IlovemusicandI lovehearingitbasicallyconstantlybutisthatcuttingoffcommunicationwithpeopleandisthis creatingmorepeopletonottalkorspeak.IbelievethatBradurycouldseethefuturethrough suchlittleinventionsheknewthathumannaturealwaysmakesussoweareprogressinguntilwe cantbeanymoreandthat'swhatIthinkBradburysawhesawasmallinventionintechnology

andhesawhowitwaspowerfulandhowitcanbemanipulatedandsohewrotethisbookalmost asawarningshowingusashumanswhatcouldhappenifwedoenduptooattachedto meaninglessandbrainlessactivitiesthenwetoocouldenduplikethem.Thisalsochallengedme toseejusthoworifIcouldfunctionwithoutmyphoneatechnologyandafterjustamerecouple ofhoursIcouldnotdoitandIrealizedthatiswhattheyaremadeforthisbookjustopenedmy eyestoseethefactthatIdon'thavemotivationtoreadbutIsomehowhavemotivationtoscroll mindlesslyontiktokorinstagrambutIsomehowcan'tspendthattimereadingabookor sleeping.Thisbookalsocausedmetolisten,topeopleandtotheworldbecauseinsteadof hearingnatureandbirdsandtreesinsteadIhearmusicandnotlivemusicIhearthemusici'm alwayslisteningtoandIwouldsaythatmajorityofteenssimplycouldnotsurvivewithouta phonebecausewehaveeverythingthereit'sourwholelife,it'sseeingourfriendsandseeing whatpeoplearedoingandIrealizedafterIreadthisbookjusthowbadlyIneededtogivemyself abreakfrommyphonethatwayIdon'tgettodependedonanelectronicdevicetocontrolmy life.

Opinion Piece - Rough Draft

Homework-Manystudentsdreaditandtrytheirbesttogettheleastamountofit.Thatis whythereisastrongcontroversywhetherornothomeworkisnecessarytolearningandifitisa helporahindrancetoastudent'slearning.Ibelievethathomeworkshouldbethereforextrahelp orpractice,butwithtoomuchhomeworkthereislesslearningandmorefrustrationforstudents. ThatiswhyIthinkthathomeworkissomewhatunnecessaryforstudents,because althoughthereasonforhomeworkishelp,manystudentsdon'thavethetimesotheygetanswers andcheattheirwaythrough,whichiscounterproductivetothecause.Manyteachersdecideto putalotofpressureonthestudentsbyassigningalotofhomework,manystudentsespeciallyin highschoolhavejobsandotherimportantclassesthattheyarealreadybalancingsotheadded stressofhomeworkcouldbedetrimental.Manyteensaresleepdeprivedduetostressthatcomes withhomework,withbalancingsomuchstayingupistheonlywaytheycandotheirwork.But sleepdeprivationleedstomanyotherissuesthatteensoftenexperience,suchasanxiety depression,andevensuicidalthoughts.

Manyteensalreadyexperiencementalhealthproblemssimplyfortheatmosphereof schoolandtheenvironmentthatcanbesomewhattoxicincertaininstances.Sowithanyadded stressthatincludeshomeworkitcouldreallyputastrainonmanystudents.Notonlywiththe stressandtheanxietythatcomeswithtoomuchofaworkload,manystudentsdon'tevendotheir ownworkortry,theyjustgettheiranswersfromothersandotherwisegettheeasywayoutsoit's practicallyuselessandtheonlythingitteachesorhelpswithissimplyrewording.

OverallIbelievethathomeworkdoesnothelpstudentsandinfactstressesoutthe studentsevenmorecausingextrastrainintheirlife.

Homeworkissomethingthatmanypeopleassociatewiththeirworstmemoriesfrom school.Thecountlessnightsstayingupandwritingthatessayorstudyingforthattest,it'sa commonexperienceformanyandthatiswhythisresonatessowellwithall,ithassparkedthe conversationonwhetherornothomeworkisahelporahindranceineducation.Ipersonally believethathomeworkjustaddstoaddedstressonstudentsandcancauseburnoutandmental healthissues.

Studentshavealottobalance,manyhavesports,jobs,friends,andothercommitments thattheyhavetokeepupwith.Schoolisextremelyexhaustingandmanystudentsreportfeeling drainedandantisocialafteraschoolday.Manystudentswanttodecompressafterschool,but insteadarefacedwithmoreworkthattheyhavetodo.Thementalexhaustionisonecomponent butmanystudentscraveaneasywayoutanddonotchallengethestudentorhelpthestudent practice.Homeworkisdesignedinorderforstudentstogainfurtherknowledgebypracticingat homebutattimesitwilljustleavethestudentfeelingfrustratedandhopeless.

Ibelievethatfromexhaustionthatcomeswithalargerworkload,andtryingtobalance everythinggoingoninstudents'personallives,manysufferfromburnout.Burnoutfromwork andthestressthatcontinuesthroughit.Thispertainsspecificallytohigherachievingstudents whohavelargerworkloadsandthisinturncausessleepdeprivationandmentalhealthissues. Thesestudentsaremorelikelytogiveupextracurricularsandgiveupmanyfriendshipsdueto thefactthattheydon'thaveenoughtimetocompletewhattheyneedto.

Withthesleepdeprivationassociatedwithmorework,ittransfersintomentalhealth problems,sleepdeprivationcausesaseriesofproblems,childrenandadultsthatdonotget

sufficientsleepareathigherriskformentalhealthproblemsalongwithattentionandbehavior problems,thuscontributingtopooracademicperformance.Mentalhealthplaysalargerolein wellbeingandmotivationwithmanypeoplealreadyexperiencingsometypeofstressoranxiety fromschool,thisisaffectingstudentseverywhere.

IntheendIbelievethathomeworkislessofahelpthanahindranceandalthough designedtohelpastudentsucceedandgrowineducationitdoesjusttheopposite,andcauses unwantedstress,anxiety,andsleepdeprivation,andburnout.

Narrative

My Soundtrack to Life (Brainstorm)

Narrative My Soundtrack to Life

1.CaliforniaGurls-KatyPerry,SnoopDog

2.TimberfeatKe$ha-Pitbull,Kesha

3.WelcometoNewYork-TaylorSwift

4.NightChanges-OneDirection

5.WeAreYoungfeatJanelleMonae-fun,JanelleMonae

6.ShutUpandDance-WALKTHEMOON

7.Happier-Marshmello,Bastille

8.Baby-JustinBeiber,Ludacris

9.Radioactive-ImagineDragons

10.MyHouse-FloRida

ThesesongsallholdveryimportantmemoriesandveryspecicmemoriesSomecamefromschool,otherscame fromfriendsandfamilyandsomememoriescamefromjustmelisteningtomusicIenjoyedbutintheendthese songsandmusicshapedwhoIamtodayandwhyIamwhoIam

Brainstorms (I choose ones I like)

Reflection

IamveryproudoftheworkthatIhavecompletedthroughthissemester.Ihavelearneda lotaboutmyselfandmywriting.WhencomingintoAPLangIwasextremelyintimidatedby everything,butslowlyastimecreptbyIrealizedthatwearehalfwaythereandwithevery brainstorminthatnotebook,(whichIthoughtwasuseless)wasworthit,causenowIgainedso manynewideasandtopicstowriteabout.IenjoyedreadingFahrenheit451andtakingnotes becauseIhavepassionforreadingandIlovebooks,sotomethatwasthebest.Ihavelearnedso manynewthingsandoneskillthatIwouldsayhasdefinitelyimprovedismyuseofpunctuation. IthinkthatIshouldcontinuetoworkonvocabularyandgoodsentencestructure,aswellas keepingmythoughtsneat.

Oneinstancethatsticksouttome,IwasreadinginmypersonaltimeandIstarted realizingsmallrhetoricalchoicesthattheauthorwasusingthroughoutthebookandIthought thatwasveryinterestingthatwhatIwaslearningwasactuallyhavinganimpactonhowIwas readinginmypersonaltime.Ichosethoselast2brainstormsIincludedbecauseofhowmuch imageryIusedinbothhowIdescribedbakingandhowIusedimagerytobringittolife.

IntheendIwasgoingintoLangthinkingitwasgoingtobeanextremelydifficultclass thatwasgoingtoteachmepracticallynothing.IprovedmyselfverywrongandIknowseveral instanceswhenIusespecificrhetoricalchoicesinotherclassesinordertogetmypointacross stronger.