[construct] feedback
The final words
My peers definitely seem to favor Concept 4 due to it’s interaction, material of choice, and geometric flow. Their feedback is very valuable and is similar in context that a client would provide.
Mary Leiser states:
2/20/11 9:52 am “It looks great. The overall layout has a good flow. I can see the grid structure without being smashed in the face with it. I like how your using the numbers to carry through the piece. Even the attention to including the spelling of each number is unique. Keep that going through out. Be careful with the numbers that start on the right. Find a way to give a clue as to where the text starts from. what do you read first. Use a drop cap or a similar color or a large font to indicate that you start there. In #3 I’m not sure if I start reading all the way to the left of if I go directly below the number. #’s 5 and 7 are the only ones that you have on the angle right. As all your other numbers are straight on these are a bit out of place but if you make them similar it will help them look purposed rather than a mistake. Your #9 panel may be the weakest. There seems to be a lot of text on this panel so maybe break it up differently as you have done in your other panels. Final comment, is there a back side to this? I know it’s not necessary I seem to always want to know that. I must ask everyone. I think it has a great direction. I can see that you have studied the text and understand where it is going. Keep moving it forward towards the digital stage and I think you will have a nice piece on your hands.”
Thomas Creamer states:
2/20/11 3:58 pm “Great process book! Awesome references of experimental type, thanks. The mock up looks great too. I like the directional elements of the layout using the type, it gives a flow to the piece just as much as it does add style. The texture of the booklet and color of the type will certainly add to the overall quality of the piece. This seems like a logic size also. Whats going on the reverse side?”
Dyan Gulovsen states:
2/22/11 9:39 pm “This is looking great so far. It really helps to see the mock up; it cleans it up and visually makes more sense. I like the diagonals and different ways you have laid the text out. I feel this project doesn’t necessarily mean making the text indecipherable, just interesting and non traditional. It still needs to read as an informational booklet. I think the chip board is interesting. Good
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Denise Gross states:
I think it works well and it flows well. The only thing that is a bit of a stand out to me, and it is probably just me, is the drop cap in each paragraph. I think when I see that it brings me back to the idea of a “regular” magazine layout. I wonder if there is a way to treat it that makes it more experimental? Like maybe just invert the color so it is stroked instead of filled. Please feel free to throw out that advice if you don’t agree. It is just when my eye was moving through the piece it would stop on the drop caps. Anyway, it looks great! Can’t wait to see more!”
2/22/11 3:13 pm “Wow Jamie you have progressed a lot! I love your accordion book design. I also really enjoy your use of grid structure. I can see how it will easily guide the viewer’s eye through the material. This is something I am struggling with. I want to use an unusual grid but still make it very easy for the viewer to absorb the information. This is looking great!” 2/20/11 5:15 pm “It looks really great so far. I don’t know if it needs to be readable in every aspect. I know this is a disagreement with everyone else’s comments so far but it is supposed to be “experimental” and some experimental pieces are not all legible. Experimental can mean so many things. So I think this is up to you as to how readable you want some of the panels to be. I think another aspect of “experimentation” that you could add into this, if you wanted to, would be to actually create some kind of unique forms for the numbers. I am saying to create your own numbers instead of using a font. It might add to the depth. That being said, it would probably need to be something relatively geometric if you decided to do it. Maybe it could reflect, somehow, the directionality of the grid on the corresponding page. Anyway, these are just ideas. I love it so far!”
Christopher Italiano states:
2/22/11 9:39 pm “nice process book, first off concept H (page 18). scissor fold thats a blast. it can go on and on in so many directions. the final accordion is set up nice, but some type is sketched out even, thin and organized. exploit the page numbers, make them huge, differ the copy size, weights or faces from each page as the progression travels through the booklet. i really like that it is a tall piece. would you read this and let it flow off your lap, fold it up or hang it? perhaps to spin around. i also like your rounded edges in concept 4. nice werk.”
2/27/11 10:54 am “Wow! That looks great! I can’t wait to see it put together in real life. I especially love the way you are treating the numbers. They are all so different yet there is a real rhythm to them.
Dyan Gulovsen states:
2/27/11 12:20 pm “This looks fantastic the grid structure really works. The numbers are dynamic and creative and the diagonal text is great. The colors are vibrant yet the entire piece has a very clean feel. I think clean is important as the booklet has to be functional as well as experimental. I think you have done an excellent job all that is left to do is to print and assemble.”
Marvin Eans states:
2/28/11 12:29 am “This is great work Jamie! I love the flow of your process book as well. I think your booklet displays a strong use of the type and your color options work well with the piece. I think you did a great job experimenting with the grid and your booklet has a nice balance of elements. I look forward to seeing the final product.”
Prof Merrick Henry states:
2/28/11 11:36 pm “There is a rich control over the typographic composition and color. The large letter-forms against the smaller treatment in the design is working harmoniously. The earlier design on the colored background truly gives the design a rich contrast and I hope that the readability against that is sufficient in your final output. I can not wait to see how the design turns out.”
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Jamie Turpin . Wood + Chipboard Design . Portfolio Design
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