Feedback on Term 1, 2011_rev0

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2nd year schedule of progress: first term 2011 KEY: EX (excellent)/ VG (very good)/ G (good)/ OK (just pass)/ P(poor/ fail)

*log books will be reviewed in second term/ MIP about to proceed

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208018344 OSVALDO JORGE CAPINDISSA

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208029893 ALWYN JACOBUS CARSTENS

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COMNINOS

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weekly blog posts online portf/ Hub office work nr of quality progres quality func.

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BRAND

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CTD & STW

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209258241 HERMAN

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PSS

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206102631 MUGAMMAD MUSTAPHA AHMED 206153562 LIYAAM ARIEFF regist? JAKOB BASSON

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tech. model 1 Comments on idea development this is preced me ent G yes you need a technological precedent of architectural merit that makes use of more VG simple timber framed construction, like the Nelson Mandela Pavilions. The model is a good start - but the scale seems far too big - you need to have a main idea, please book a one on one crit. VG

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not yet very nice precedent, please show development

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neat, easy to read, just add your Friday blogs

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not yet very thin precedent that is not really relevant, please redo

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Fbook Was it your model on fbook? You must please always upload to your own blog, ? cannot mark from fbook. Also that model gives no indication of structure of idea.

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the background is beautiful, but I cannot read the text over it, also like your writing, but add a bit more about office life It is not possible to mark your blog submissions - no headings for what the link is posted for, the same link more than once, and then on slideshare "precedent" without explanation or anything, please improve

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Exhibition, well illustrated, clear process, references, clear process, rethink roof element on the tower, show in the model: structure and the making of the hub

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not yet Louis not yet not yet not yet not yet not yet not available, but spoke to Jolanda - is catching up Carol not yet not yet VG VG VG G not yet you need a technological precedent of architectural merit that makes use of more simple timber framed construction, like the Nelson Mandela Pavilions

209054131 GARETH JASONGOADSBY no 207155381 IGESHEN GOVENDER yes 210032243 CARIEN GREYVENSTEYNyes

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210053380 MISHECK GWESELE 209084642 JOSUA BENJAMIN HAARHOFF

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STEFAN RYAN HOLMAN TAAHIR JABAAR EUGENE WILLIAM JANSEN AAQILAH BANOO KARJIEKER

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Pages, check text colour against background, cant access Hub upload through google docs Pages, good extras, shows interest, Noero Wolff etc.,

Oh no! Nice blog posts, but where is the hub work? You seem to be totally lost!

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not yet Main idea? I am not going to give you marks - you need to write in your OWN words G and not copy from catalogues, the func and tech precedent and analyses NOT well done - please see examples of other students

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check spelling please! Glad you enjoy it there!

thought we should share your quote: Favourite quote...‘All men dream but not equally, those who dream by night in the dusty recess of their minds wake in the day to find that it was vanity, but the dreamers of the day are dangerous men, for they may act their dream with open eyes to make it possible.’ –T.E.Lawrence.

cannot access his blog at all

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where is the rest?

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Well organised and easy to read!

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205181791 MARVIN DANIELS yes 205146708 MARISA GAZA DE CASTRO yes 209007745 TIAGO MIGUELDOS PITASANTOS PEREIRA yes

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comments on blog

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Creative performance as movement. Add sketches to analyses, Josh Keams precedent is good - study this one. It is not clear where the two round forms come from.

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not Pages, nice accessible blog, easy to read/ use, thank you availa ble G

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Meeting room, well illustrated/ presented. Technology: what are the spans? Are VG you joining gumpoles, and if so how? Develop 3d form and spaces. It's too much of a "building" - too solid/ closed up, looks like a brick building. No toilets required - will be provided elsewhere

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where is the rest? Pages, nice accessible blog, easy to read/ use, thank you

where is the work? Love the background picture on your blog - but that is all there is!?

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Broadcasting:Very nice models! Think about how you are going to make the structure for the stairs - the overhead structure looks great so far. Find some architectural precedent - of actual buildings/structures - published or by good architects

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Pages, good start, please catch up.

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Pages, Gaudi architect assig on slideshare, ok, no ref, blog legibility could improve, text on background

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Check spelling please! Blog well laid out, but background makes it difficult to read. Keep the fairie for a more personal blog, cute, but not professional.

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You write well - I had a good laugh here and there too! Thanks! BUT WHERE ARE THE SUBMISSIONS!?


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Learning opportunities through projection: show structure, antropometrics thin, look at Alvar Aalto precedent, develop the space-defining elements (Righini), nice model but now add structure

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Pages, good precedent, always use ref, and ANALYSE

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Clear blog and good start, just thin!

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not yet P - ref Play, Cartoons: don't fabricate a literal form - please see your lecturer. Think to SPATIALLY! Stairs? INCOMPLETE space ?

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No pages, chcek legibility (letter colour against backgrond). Please note correct subject names: not principles of arch design, but STW, CTD

200705377 PIETER JACOBUS LE ROUX

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Radial arts: Very nice model - scale of poles just too big for actual size? Work to scale, it will open up new ideas about the structure, for instance, how does the roof work? You need to find proper architectural precedent.

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Your blog looks clean and architectural, like it. El

209105283 JAY DEE DANWILL LE ROUX 209104198 ANDREA WHITNEY LOUW 210050098 KENNETH SPENCER MAINPHILIP

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cannot access the google docs

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blog posts a bit thin, this is me jpg very good, but a bit more info about you?

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not yet cannot access your doc on google docs - you need to share it

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you are behind in your work!

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blog easy to read, well written, well organised

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not yet Main idea: Difficult to see what is functional and what technological? Nice precedent. Do model to explain idea.

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Neat blog, where weekly posts? Make sure things posted under correct pages.

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KRUGER

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207038147 FRANCOIS

LA GRANGE

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regist? CLAYTON DEREK MARVIN 207029024 PHIWE MATOLE

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209028025 NATALIE NWABISA MDONGA

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209069368 NOMKHITHA YOLANDA MFIKILI

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209105623 DANE ALLAN MINORDS 208090797 ZIYANDA MJOBO

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207066159 TANYA DANIELLE MOODALEY

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209040033 AYAVUYA MGCINI MVA

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210033681 LUCIENNE PIERRE MYBURGH

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PETERS

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208103309 THATO BAFANAQUABE

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209009101 ANTONIO MANUEL QUENTAL

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RAMNCWANA yes

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Brain frame: Your writing and precedent good, but the way that you present it is a EX bit messy - do not use crayon like lines in the background and make sure things are pasted on straight. Can you not do a layout on powerpoint or something in stead of pasting on? Make sure to include the technology and structure on your model - ie how will it be constructed?

Your feedback on work on of the best so far! Like it that you include photos and point out good things and things you are struggling with. Also include the drawings in your seperate online portfolio

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Education trhough projection. Idea nicely developed - the idea of projection can go a long way, must have skype crit. Where are the gumpoles and why so symmetrical? The analysis work should be better organised - it is difficult to read. Thanks for referrencing! Would like to see picture of 1st precedent.

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like the colour in the text and the comedy, however background very busy, makes it difficlut to read

empty blog 1

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difficult to read the pages on the black - change colour, well written, your boss sounds great, good precedent

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I am so inspired by your church story - it really seems like a miracle that you get to work on it. No pages

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VG add visual s? ? Make some pages so that you can organise your work better

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Play: Your functional analysis is good, however, your model certainly does not say play to me. It is too static and symmetrical - kids are not that controlled! Please look in 10years100buildings for the creche buildings - there are some great examples of "play on" buildings. Also find good, similar scale, architectural precedent (which would actually be that out of the book mentioned)

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Movement:Wow, wonderfully explained process! You did well! And design ? developed well - improve physical model - make it just in white and sosatiesticks the colour not architectural. Also, look at some good precedent, this is still lacking for both function and technology.

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Blog accesible and easy to read, give a bit more meat to some of your Friday blogs - more on the actual work you got involved in. But looks like you are enjoying it!

not yet nothing to mark yet! Blog difficult to read with busy background. Networking junction (homework&play), add diagrams (e.g. ergonomics), develop space-defining elements and the idea, how and why are the three spaces different? How are they defined/ made differently?

not yet What is main idea? You need good precedent. Also you must work to scale - your current sketches is misleading you in terms of size and technology.

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Pages ok, carbonmade, references yes, check spelling, grammar, interesting video links

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No weekly blogs on your work yet.


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207029830 FAIYAD RYLANDS 208073965 HENDRIK JACOBUS SAAIMAN

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SABELA SAMPSON

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SAVAHL

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210041609 MICHAEL CHRISTOPHER SEDGWICK

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207020604 ROLAND MONTANA SONS 200713094 EMMANUEL JACOBUS SPAMER

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210029641 GHAARITH

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STEYN

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210036893 TRUTER VISSER 208102671 CURWIN RINALDI WARMBERG 208032010 NOEL JEAN WEHR

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VINYU

WENTZEL

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subjects: all except STW only STW+CTD only STW only CTD only ATR, PSS only ATR, CTD

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Main idea? Look in anthropometircs, the idea of power good, but taking the logo so EX literal into the form is a bit problematic. Nice model - why masonry right in middle? Find more good architectural technological precedent

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Could not read your google doc!

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Main idea? Like the way structure attaches to hub and randomness of structure will it be enclosed/clad at some points? Need good functional precedent and also more technological - will enrich your work.

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You write very well! Thanks for comprehensive info and intersting info about your life!

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From open to closed? Info well presented, model interesting, idea not that clear yet. Also feels very closed. Great precedent study - scale of haven good for this project too.

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Please check spelling!

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Pages created, but still rather empty. Blog easy to navigate - clear and structure. Work easy to access.

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Brain frame: clear idea, now DEVELOP! Reference all sources, delve deeper, develop your ideas, explain all decisions with diagrams and key text, process drawings are good but must be annotated. not yet Creative performance: add anthropometrics, sizes, elaborate on precedent. Your main idea is not stated. Incomplete - please catch up.

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Glad to see you got input from Mr Nughtingale. You had a good discussion! Clear blog. Now please develop.

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not yet Multi functional, well presented, clear diagrams, useful and exciting precedent

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Pages, nice accessible blog, easy to read/ use, thank you

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Play/ dance, promising form making, check the scale, useful precedent, karoo wilderness centre: who's the architect?

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Pages, references, engaged work, interesting precedent

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Empty blog - no submissions yet.

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not yet Visibility and sound distribution? You need good precedent, not just copies of random pictures. Also use just your own words and relevant info.

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No weekly blogs on your work yet. Blog reads easily, add pages for subjects.

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Creative performance: Please find more precedent and do not just copy the words VG from the internet - does not show if you really understand. Model good, but very enclosed, to much building and not enough hub. Look at Nelson Mandela Pavilions the scale and technology is appropriate. Need online crit.

Blog accesible and easy to read.

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Creative performance. Please explain IDEA strong, with diagrams and text. Add diagrams to your analyses, your fuctional precedent is just a bit too large in terms of scale, to properly draw on as precedent. I suggest you add on more functional precedent. Analysis must contain key word and diagrams. Look at the consistemcy of architectural language in each project. Have alook at your model 1. Explore differnt design iterations.

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Bold and clear format, pages created, easy to navigate. Make your graphics (lettering and layouts) more "architectural" - speak to me if you don't know what I mean.

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where is the rest?

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not yet G VG (add anthro p.) ?

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Clear blog, well written, good graphics, professional and good grammar ;-), involved and thorough. at risk

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You will need to do a bit more than this!

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Can't find your Hub work?

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Main idea? You have a nice model, but not much else - need precedent and DO NOT copy text directly from the internet without referencing! And find relevant local precedent. First drawing on first hub page really scary!

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dwgs on p4 submission 1 is great - get plan/section diagrams to same standard, very well written - all posts


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