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Kirrena Gallagher English 1102 Paper 1 January 30, 2012

A Monster Like Me We all are indeed monsters. Monsters are necessary even in today‟s society. In

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any venue, the story of the monster provides a lesson to be learned. Each one truly being a warning or a cause for positive change. Monsters are scary because they point out what

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is wrong in our society. If we sentence someone to death who murdered another, what makes us so different? We justify our collective monstrous behavior by saying “he did it

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first” or „he deserves to die because he killed someone or hurt someone severely”. What

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does that really say about us? Take the movie example Frailty for instance. In this movie

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a father of two young boys is convinced that God sends an angel telling him to kill people because they are demons. His oldest son does not agree that God is telling him to kill people and is repeatedly punished for not being able to see the angel that shows his father who to kill. This father could easily be considered a monster. As an adult one of the sons confides in a police offer and leads him to see where the bodies are buried. The story has a major twist and at the end of the movie the viewer is able to see the angel and all the demons of the people who were killed. At that point the viewer is relieved that the people who were killed actually were assigned because of their demonic actions. defines monster as a being that has the power to terrify, is able to produce great harm, and possesses the explicit intent to harm. Also, saying that

Comment [kpr7]: I’m not sure why you’re summarizing this film here… Comment [kpr8]: Not a legitimate source – or very helpful. Stay with the definition provided by the two articles – Synthesize THEIR points.

the monster must be accepted by society as a being with the animus and capability to

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harm everyone or at least, each member individually in a direct and profound way. What makes us sure that we are not all monsters? If given the wrong situation, in an effort to survive or protect, it is easy to imagine oneself engaging in monstrous behaviors. However, I do believe that the media or publicity of such events or occurrences make the happening more or less monster like. One is not held accountable

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to the rules of civil society if no one holds them accountable. But then who is the judge? Who holds the judges accountable? Because of our own separate and very diverse experiences, we view the world in

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very different ways. The reaction to the threat of monsters is dramatically different from those who have and those who have not. Although the reaction is not the same, the reality that there is a real threat of monsters is universal. The lessons learned and to be learned from those threats are life long and set a standard for what is acceptable and what is not in society. Even as adult‟s fear of that Lock Nest Monster in the local lake may not be as prevalent, however, the impression will remind the adult swimmer to be mindful of precautions needed to be made for safety.

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In the articles Monster-Making: A Politics of Persuasion (Edward J. Ingebretsen) and Monsters and the Moral Imagination (Stephen T. Asma), there is an apparent agreement that monsters must be created for the betterment of society. Both

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authors stated that monsters are publicly acknowledged for their wrong doing and allow people to be entertained by their uncivil actions. But who do we hold accountable for the creation of such creatures? Those people/monsters who do not fit into the civil society‟s

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way of life. For the most part I think we create our own monsters to indeed show others the “civil: way of life.

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In the 2000 movie The Grinch Who Stole Christmas, the people of Whoville turn the one Who-who is not like them into a monster. Mr. Grinch is obviously different being that he has some hygene problems, speaks to himself out loud, and hears voices in his head. Although he posed no immediate threat to the Who‟s of Whoville, he was labeled a monster and exiled to the on snowy Mount Crumpit, a steep, 3,000-foot high mountain just north of Whoville. The Grinch was born with a heart defect, being two sizes too small, his head was not screwed on quite tight, and his feet were too large for shoes, all physical

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abnormalities that the voice in his head never fails to remind him of. He has no family or friends and only has the companionship of his dog. It is Mr. Grinch‟s belief that the people of the town are materialistic and do not share his same values, one being that Christmas is not the most important nor the only thing that matters. In turn. Mr. Grinch trys to ruin Christmas, the only thing they seem to value. The clear need to be loved and accepted goes unnoticed by the people of Whoville and ultimately they create a monster. The Santa coat and antlered dog are unconscious attempts to be who the Whos want him to be, someone who loves Christmas. Although he is completely self-sufficient and can clearly care for a pet, the people of Whoville treat him as if he would eat them if they were to get too close. In the end the Grinch is able to successfully steal all items material that represent Christmas. Doing so only enabled the Whos to realize that Christmas is not about presents, decorations, Roast Beast and Who Hash. In addition to their realization the Grinch realizes that one cannot steal what Christmas really represents. Mr. Ginch retuns the stolen items accepting that he cannot really stop Christmas and is later identified as the hero and equal.

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As an easy target, Mr. Grinch was subject to cruel treatment and because it was a communal decision, Mr. Grinch was treated as if he were truly a monster. The making of a monster was simple and almost necessary for that community to allow all the Whos of Whoville to see what was intolerant and uncivil. The leadersip and publicity of what the leader thought was un-Who-like played a key role in how the people of Whoville thought of monsters. Although this is a fictional story, we can learn something from Mr. Grinch‟s experience; society is not all that different from the definition it creates for the word “monster” neither are individuals. Children may simply learn it is not okay to be different.

KirrenaYou offer so very many valid, fascinating points in this paper, particularly in the initial pages. The biggest roadblock is a lack of focus on the articles and a lack of explanation of those ideas (both your own and those in the articles). Give me MORE: explain, explore, connect…you’re so close to excellence I can see it. The analysis of The Grinch is interesting, and fairly well done, but not of particular use in a synthesis, since neither articles mentions it. You could make it work, IF you clearly analyze it using the framework set up by the articles, with clear references to the ideas from those authors. Does that make sense? You’re closer to getting this than you realize; just remember, don’t ask your audience to interpret. Tell us how YOU interpreted it. In terms of grammar/style, you seem to struggle just a bit with fragments, but I think that arises from a desire to engage your audience in a conversation. Just watch out for that, and for wordiness arising from the Passive Voice and from the “to be” verbs. You can do this, Kirrena!

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