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The Cost of Service Possible title: The Price of Service

Word count: 705 “I wish I could go travel the world and do some good, but I just don’t have the money!” Sound familiar? If you find yourself in this situation, try looking into humanitarian service trips. Those who go on humanitarian service trips generally find that what they gain from the

Comment [Kelsey1]: “Doing Service Abroad” “A Helping Hand: Humanitarian Travel”

Comment [Kelsey2]: I’m not sure I buy into this hypothetical. I might swallow it more easily if you take out the phrase “and do some good” (which sounds awful, but I feel like that makes sense from a logic perspective: I wish I could travel, but I don’t have money, so I’ll consider going on a humanitarian trip, because then I can travel cheaply).

experience far outweighs the money that they spend, but as with all travel, . Tthese trips can be costly though. So just how much does a humanitarian trip cost? It is difficult to give an exact sum figures due to the variety of programs, countries, and trips you can take, but it is possible toyou can get an idea of what you can should expect to spend on a humanitarian trip, of what is

Comment [Kelsey3]: In general, when writing strong prose, you should avoid asking questions. We’ve already asked one in this paragraph, so I suggest this edit to write around it. Comment [Kelsey4]: This sounded very abstract and distant.

included in the program fees, and what tips there are on how to find aof programs that fits your budget. Nearly all humanitarian foundations that organize volunteer trips have a set of required fees. These fees can vary greatly depending on the location and duration of the trip, as well as the foundation that organizes the trip. Generally, the fees include everything that participants need to stay in the country: lodging, meals, work materials, and necessary transportation within the country. Some programs may include health insurance or language classes. By using the facilities and eating the food that the program arranges, volunteers often spend less money travelling with a service program than they would spend had they gone to the country on their own. Program fees can range from a little more than one hundred dollars to a few thousand depending on the country, program, and length of time. Programs often have lower fees if they work arrange details through with locals for their arrangements. Adam Richardson, a student at Brigham Young University, went on a trip to

Comment [Kelsey5]: I worry that saying “work with locals” seems like they help them with their humanitarian efforts. Comment [Kelsey6]: You say “trip” later in this same sentence.

Tijuana, Mexico with the Charity Anywhere Foundation and paid $350 for a ten-day trip. The program fees were quite low because the foundation had made arrangements with locals for lodging and meals. The group stayed on the upper- floor of a Tijuana clinic and hired a local

Comment [Kelsey7]: Hyphenation should only be here if this is an adjective

woman to be their chef. They slept on the floor and didn’t have hot water to shower with. Richardson commented about the trip, “It was cold and we really learned to appreciate the blessings we have. But the food was great, we had a great time, and . . . you can’t beat that price.” Generally, traveling to and from the country and spending money while in the country are not included in the program fees; however, some programs will include airfare. Shereesa Maw, a 21-year-old from Ogden, Utah, went to China for four months to teach English with International Language Program (ILP). She paid a fee of $2,500 for the trip, which included everything previously mentioned as well as her flight to and from China. The only other thing she had to budget for was for souvenirs and travel within the country for sight-seeing. For these,

Comment [Kelsey8]: Keeping the phrasal verb together.

she spent a total of about $700 for the entire trip, and she felt that it was more than enough to do everything she wanted. Though at times these program fees can seem overwhelming, they are often less than compare what one you might spend at home or school for a semester to a semester serving abroad. Since most of these trips are all-inclusive, it is usually a good deal to travel with an organization and engage in humanitarian service. However, for those who haveif you’re on a very tight budget and struggle to afford these trips, many programs offer tax-deductible fundraising options or discounts. Some programs offer student discounts for students, and some have bonus deals like a $100 credit if you bring a friend, half off the program fee for your spouse if you both go, or a few hundred dollars off if you pay the whole fee up front. Through ILP’s

Comment [Kelsey9]: Because we’re presenting this as a cheap alternative, if you’re on an even tighter budget, these things might be a helpful consideration to get you off the fence.

donation and fundraising program, Maw was able to obtain nearly all of her program fees, and was left with only $800 to come up with on her own. Such a great variety of programs exist that anyone can find a program that fits into any budget. Some countries have higher living and travel expenses than the US, so spend some time

Comment [Kelsey10]: We need a point of comparison. Higher than what?

doing a little research before you decide which program to choose. Going on service trips costs money, but it is worth it. Just remember: Ppeople who go on these trips agree that their incredible experiences they receive from these trips more than makes up for the cost of service.

Comment [Kelsey11]: I felt like this was already very clear, and this phrase isn’t a particularly eloquent restatement. For length reasons, we can probably omit it.