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Lesson 6

University education or Vocational training 21.11.2015

Too much emphasis is placed on going to university for academic study. People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

1) Analysing the topic Subjects: high school students, high school graduates Trend: Too much emphasis is placed on going to university for academic study.

Ngày nay giáo dục đại học được xem trọng quá mức. Argument: People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers.

Người ta nên được khuyến khích đi học nghề bởi vì nguồn nhân lực tay chân như thợ điện hoặc thợ sửa ống nước đang bị thiếu hụt. Question: Do you agree or disagree?  Agree – proving vocational training should be promoted.  Disagree – proving vocational training should not be promoted.

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2) Write the opening (2 sentences) 1st sentence – rephrasing the topic sentence

Too much emphasis is placed on going university for academic study. How: change the subject by using other words to form a new sentence.  Use “place” (v) Placing too much emphasis on going university for academic study is becoming an increasingly popular trend nowadays.  Use “people” (n) People are placing too much emphasis on university education. 2nd sentence - rephrasing the argument and answer the question

Rephrasing the argument People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers.  Use “vocational training”

 Use “necessary” (a)

Vocational training should

It is necessary to encourage

be promoted to solve the lack

people to do vocational training

of qualified tradespeople.

to solve the lack of qualified tradespeople.

Answer the question People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?  In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea it is necessary to encourage people to do vocational training to solve the lack of qualified tradespeople.

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Combine 2 sentence People are placing too much emphasis on university education. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that it is necessary to encourage people to do vocational training to solve the lack of qualified tradespeople.

3) Analysing topic vocabulary Too much emphasis is placed on going university for academic study. People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. Use Thesaurus and Collocation dictionary

higher education Giáo dục đại học

noun

university education tertiary education

Học đại học

verb

study higher education acquire tertiary education enroll in

Vào đại học

verb

apply to attend

+ university

enter academic qualifications Bằng đại học

noun

university degrees bachelor’s degrees acquire academic qualifications

Lấy bằng đại học

verb

gain university degrees obtain bachelor’s degrees

Giáo dục nghề

verb

vocational training + programme, courses

Học nghề

verb

attend, do, take + vocational training

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tradespeople, Lao động tay chân

noun

manual workers, blue-collar workers

Trình độ cao

adjective qualified, skilled, well-trained

Đặt nặng,

noun

emphasis

nhấn mạnh

verb

emphasize

[1]

[2]

[3]

Quan trọng

Ưu tiên Then chốt

adjective important, noun

adjective top-priority, noun

priority

noun

core, key

Xem là ưu tiên

importance

be considered important verb

quan trọng

be deemed top-priority be perceived as the key

Note [1] Được xem là quan trọng  Education should be considered more important than other factors contributing to the success of a nation.  Education should be considered the most important factor contributing to the success of a nation.  It is necessary to attach much importance to education. [2] Được xem là ưu tiên  Education should be deemed top-priority in the development of a nation.  Governments should make it a priority to invest more in education. [3] Được xem là trung tâm, mục tiêu then chốt, cốt lõi  Education should be perceived as the key/core of the development of a nation.

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Upgrade the opening with vocabulary People are placing too much emphasis on university education. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that it is necessary to encourage people to do vocational training to solve the lack of qualified tradespeople. Too much importance is not being attached to higher education. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that it is necessary to stimulate people to do vocational training courses to solve the lack of skilled manual workers.

4) Write Introduction 4.1. Rephrasing the topic Too much emphasis is placed on going university for academic study.  Placing too much importance on tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular trend nowadays.  Enrolling in universities is often deemed more important than taking vocational training courses.

4.2. Rephrasing the argument It is necessary to encourage people to do vocational training to solve the lack of qualified tradespeople.  Vocational training should be promoted.  Vocational training should be perceived as the key to the current shortage of skilled manual workers such as electricians or plumbers.  People should consider vocational training as the core of developing the country’s workforce.

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4.3. Writing the introduction Body 1 There are some understandable reasons why + rephrasing the trend  There are some understandable reasons why placing too much importance on tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular trend nowadays.

Body 2 On the other hand, I believe that + rephrasing the argument  On the other hand, I believe that vocational training should be promoted.

5) Body 1 5.1. Build up vocabulary Mở ra cơ hội công việc Đưa đường dẫn lối

open the door to job opportunities verb

guide, lead

noun

guidance, lead

Ước mong

verb

Tương lai tươi sáng

noun

Chịu trách nhiệm Đột phá khoa học

hope wish bright career

adjective responsible for noun

take/ assume responsibility for

noun

scientific + discoveries/ breakthroughs

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5.2. Brainstorming (body 1) Finding idea to clarify why too much importance is being attached to university education. How: make several questions with why, what advantages, how‌ Q1: What are advantages of getting university degrees? A: It can open the door to better job opportunities for people. Q2: Why do most Vietnamese parents want their children to study university education but is not vocational training? A: In Vietnam, most parents want to guide their children to enroll in famous universities with the hope for their bright career in the future. Q3: What is the role of university education? A: This type of education plays a vital role in training essential careers of society such as teachers, engineers and scientists. Q4: What is the role of these careers for society? A: They take the responsibility of teaching children, building useful equipment, carrying out research and making scientific discoveries respectively which influence the entire society.

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5.3. Completing body 1 Intro There are some understandable reasons why placing too much importance on tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular trend nowadays.

Link the ideas Firstly, having a university degree could open the door to better job opportunities for people. In Vietnam, for instance, most parents want to guide their children to enroll in prestigious universities with the hope for their bright career in the future. Secondly, this type of education plays a vital role in training essential careers such as teachers, engineers and scientists. They take the responsibility of teaching children, building useful equipment, carrying out research and making scientific discoveries respectively which influence the entire society.

6) Body 2 6.1. Build up vocabulary Quan niệm, nếp nghĩ

noun

mindset

Dẫn tới

verb

result in

Mất cân bằng nhân lực

noun

Thất nghiệp

noun

(rate of) unemployment

Nhu cầu trong nước

noun

domestic demand

Thu hút đầu tư nước ngoài

verb

attract foreign investment

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unbalanced workforce workforce imbalance

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6.2. Brainstorming (body 2) Finding idea to prove your opinion: vocational training should be promoted. How: make several questions with why, what advantages, how… Q1: What are advantages of promoting vocational training? A: This can address the problems of unbalanced workforce and the highrate of unemployment. Q2: What is the causes of the problems of unbalanced workforce? A: This is due to people’s mindset of attaching too much importance to university education. → There is a great number of people graduating from universities every year. Q3: What is the causes of the problems of unemployment? A: The great number of people graduating from universities is larger than the needs of society. Q4: What is the role of vocational training? A: This type of education can train a number of skilled manual workers. Q5: What is the role of skilled manual workers? A: They are the core of any businesses. Q6: What are advantages of having a large number of skilled manual workers for a nation? A: This can not only meet the great demand of domestic companies, but also attract the foreign investment.

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6.3. Completing body 2 Intro On the other hand, I believe that vocational training should be promoted.

Link the ideas People’s mindset of attaching too much importance to university education has resulted in the problem of unbalanced workforce and the problem of unemployment. The great number of people graduating from universities every year is now much larger than the needs of society, so it would be difficult for them to land a job. As a consequence, encouraging people to take vocational training programmes would be an effective solution for these problems. In addition, tradespeople are the core of any businesses. Therefore, a large number of well-trained manual workers can not only meet the great demand of domestic companies, but also attract the foreign investment.

7) Conclusion In conclusion, although (the trend) is beneficial to some extent, I believe that (your answer to the question agree or disagree) because (the reasons you have stated in the body 2)

Completing the conclusion In conclusion, despite the great importance of higher education, I believe that people should consider vocational training as the core of developing the country’s workforce because promoting this kind of education can compensate the shortage of tradespeople, thereby resolving the unbalanced workforce and the high rate of unemployment.

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Completing the essay Too much importance is now being attached to higher education. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that it is necessary to stimulate people to do vocational training courses to solve the lack of skilled manual workers. There are some understandable reasons why placing too much importance on tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular trend nowadays. Firstly, having a university degree could open the door to better job opportunities for people. In Vietnam, for instance, most parents want to guide their children to enroll in prestigious universities with the hope for their bright career in the future. Secondly, this type of education plays a vital role in training essential careers such as teachers, engineers and scientists. They take the responsibility of teaching children, building useful equipment, carrying out research and making scientific discoveries respectively which influence the entire society. They take the responsibility of teaching children, building useful equipment, carrying out research and making scientific discoveries respectively which influence the entire society. On the other hand, I believe that vocational training should be promoted. People’s mindset of attaching too much importance to university education has resulted in the problem of unbalanced workforce and the problem of unemployment. The great number of people graduating from universities every year is now much larger than the needs of society. As a consequence, encouraging people to take vocational training programmes would be an effective solution for these problems. In addition, tradespeople are the core of any businesses. Therefore, a large number of well-trained manual workers can not only meet the great demand of domestic companies, but also attract the foreign investment. In conclusion, despite the great importance of higher education, I believe that people should consider vocational training as the core of developing the country’s workforce because promoting this kind of education can compensate the shortage of tradespeople, thereby resolving the unbalanced workforce and the high rate of unemployment. (318 words) Written by Quang Sang (ielts-vuive)

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Correction and band score from the Ielts examiner 21.11.2015

Too much emphasis is placed on going to university for academic study. People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Too much importance is now being attached to higher education. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that it is necessary to stimulate people to do vocational training courses to solve the lack of skilled manual workers. There are some understandable reasons why placing too much importance on tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular trend nowadays. Firstly, having a university degree could open the door to better job opportunities for people. In Vietnam, for instance, most parents want to guide their children to enroll in prestigious universities with the hope that it will develop for their bright career in the future. Secondly, this type of education plays a vital role in training students for essential careers such as teachers, engineers and scientists. They take the responsibility of teaching children, building useful equipment, carrying out research and making scientific discoveries respectively which influence the entire society. On the other hand, I believe that vocational training should be promoted. People’s mindset of attaching too much importance to university education has resulted in the problem of an unbalanced workforce and the problem of unemployment. The great number of people graduating from universities every year is now much larger than the needs of society. As a consequence, encouraging people to take vocational training programmes would be an effective solution for these problems. In addition, trades people are the core of any business es. Therefore, a large number of welltrained manual workers can not only meet the great demand of domestic companies, but also attract the foreign investment. In conclusion, despite the great importance of higher education, I believe that people should consider vocational training as the core of developing the country’s workforce because promoting this kind of education can compensate for the shortage of tradespeople, thereby resolving the unbalanced workforce and the high rate of unemployment. (318 words) Written by Quang Sang (ielts-vuive)

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Grade Task Response

6

Since you say I completely agree it does not make sense to write more about what might be reasons to DISAGREE. You should write more about why you agree. This prevents 7. You state the extent you agree in the introduction but I suggest you also do it in the conclusion.

Cohesion and Coherence

7

It doesn’t really make sense to write a concession paragraph about why people might disagree because you are only asked for YOUR opinion and your opinion is that you totally agree […so no there is no need to talk about disagreeing at all!]. This issue prevent 8.

Vocabulary

8

A good range of vocabulary has been presented here specific to the Task 2 topic but some errors have been made. Errors with word choice: this kind of education can compensate for the shortage of trades people Errors with word endings: are the core of any business es.

Grammar

7

There are a number of different grammatical errors that have lowered the grade. These errors need to be studied and a few examples are: Errors with sentence structure with the hope that it will develop for their bright career a vital role in training students for essential careers Errors with articles (a, an, the) you can do a quiz here: resulted in the problem of an unbalanced workforce but also attract the foreign investment.

Overall

7.0

The essay has been written well but a number of issues have led to an overall lower grade: 1. If you totally agree you should focus on only saying why you agree. 2. The Task 2 opinion is better when stating - to what extent do you agree or disagree – in both the introduction and conclusion. 3. Reduce errors with sentence structures.

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