ADECUACIÓN 2.5 Raquel has thoroughly covered the topic. The topic was quite specific and she moved The introduction clearly states her personal opinion and then she goes on to provide arguments for her choice. Her exposition really reaches the objective: letting us know what her opinion is and a thorough analysis of the advantages/disadvantages she finds in both options. COHERENCIA E COHESIÓN 2.5 Nice flow and ideas really well put together using a variety of cohesive devices (first of all, speaking about…, secondly, therefore, on the other hand, even so, besides, so). CORRECCIÓN 1.5 You use a good variety of structures, Raquel, such as different verb tenses, subordinate clauses, modal verbs and relative clauses. However, there are some different serious mistakes that need some work. Please, take a look at the ones highlighted below, especially those marked in red. Improving those aspects would really improve the overall impression of your monologue.
FROM my point of view (for)
Isn’t very hot neither very cold >> it is neither hot nor very cold
Better availability and PRICE (economy)
I would rather to go Meet people who belongs TO other cultures With PRETTY DIFFERENT traditions to my country’s Go to sightseeing
Out of the typical period of vacations >> it is correct, but in English we have the expression “offpeak season” or “shoulder season” IT Is winter (is winter) This drawback TURNS INTO a positive thing (become)
Enjoy with unusual … Travel in winter HAS more benefits (have) FLUIDEZ, PRONUNCIA E ENTOACIÓN 1 I know you probably wrote an outline to help you improve fluency, but remember you won’t be able to use one in the test; so it’s better for you to prepare the monologue, but then not to use any notes while you’re recording it. Reading detracts from the overall fluency and it breaks the speaking rhythm. However, for example in your conclusion, intonation was correct! Most importantly, you should try to pronounce words ACCURATELY. What I mean is that sometimes you forget to pronounce the last letter in words and it confuses the listener.
Strong initial /h/ About /abau/
Walk /wol/ Tastes /teistes/ Etc /itiθi/>> you can use the abbreviation in writing, but in speaking we say “etcétera”, check pronunciation here RIQUEZA 2 Very good command of travelling vocabulary (accommodation, availability, sales, expenses, mild weather, traditions, cultures, exotic locations, sightseeing, scenery, low-cost, way of life, etc). Good comparatives.