readers, so creating an easier flow is what I focused, even if it meant taking out parts or adding parts. I needed to make the poem clearer, that was my main critique that readers thought I was losing my virginity, getting raped, and even cutting myself and none of those things were happening. I need to make my poem more in the moment, what was happening as I was feeling all of these emotions, because all of this happened over a matter of moments once I walked into the bedroom and saw my mother laying dead on her bed. I felt faint from the rush of emotions that I felt, which for a first try I do believe that I am off to a great start. To be able to put emotions down on paper that rushed my body that made me almost faint, I do feel like I am on my way to make this piece truly beautiful. My revisions for this piece won’t stop until I feel like I am as close to perfect as I can be. Where the reader can feel the whirlwind that I felt, and know what is going on. They will get the concept that I lost someone dear to me, someone who shared “matching heart beats,” mother and daughter. My poem goes from her dying to me finding her and then my grasp on my emotions and reality. Words will never be able to show how it felt to lose my mother, but with this poem I hope to give my readers a glimpse into what it may have felt like. I have a voice where I can affect people’s emotions and that is a power that takes responsibility. My skills as a writer will only develop from here; I have built a basis for my natural unconscious decisions when it comes to writing. So I will work from the skills that I have acquired and make every piece one where I show and don’t tell, with a balance. I have done assignments where there wasn’t enough showing and then one where there was too much, so the balance can be found in the middle and I am working towards that middle.