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Personal  Essay  for  Stowaway

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Kevin Haws Insider—Just the Ticket Stowaway Word Count: 410 E.T. Phoned Home. You Can Too. So as it turns out, the Extra-Terrestrial isn’t the only one who needs to keep in touch with his home in a foreign land. And with all the new technology for cells and Smartphones, it should be a lot simpler than back in 1982. But what about when traveling

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abroad? Stories of iPhone bills in the thousands scare us into leaving phones off or simply at home. There are certain ways to lessen the pain and the cost of using your phone abroad. You just need to be prepared and know a few tricks and facts. Know your service provider. All of the major wireless operators in the U.S. can allow for international roaming and calling, but certain companies have more extensive networks depending on what tech they use. AT&T and T-Mobile use global system for mobile communication (GSM) which is used worldwide, thus more likely to work in foreign countries than phones that use Verizon or Sprint. Roam off, manual on. With Smartphones, turn off automatic functions and change the setting to manual. Consider only turning on the automatic functions

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actually one of the more expensive parts of cell use abroad.

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Use a Skype to Go number for low cost international calls. Skype allows for calls

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to be forwarded and save on roaming charges. Simply tell Skype the international

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number you want to call and they will give you a new number to dial. Call it from

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like checking email when there’s a free wireless connection. Data charges are

your phone and go straight through abroad. Since there is no internet connection

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or data plan needed, it’s perfect for when you’re on the move abroad.

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