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The Ten Commandments Camilla Black

camilla.black@loop.colum.edu


INT. JACK AND KEELO’S APARTMENT - DAY JACK, 28 sits on a couch in a messy apartment. He smokes a blunt and flips through channels on TV. He takes a bite of some pizza on the table. KEELO, 29 walks in the apartment in a janitor’s outfit and throws a bag of cleaning supplies on the floor. He sits down. KEELO Man, I got fired today. I’ve been at Cloud State since we dropped out. They blamed it on budget cuts. Damn it. Jack tosses the remote on the table and gives Keelo a funny look. JACK So both of us are unemployed now. KEELO Yep. JACK Jesus, Keelo. We’re already late on all our bills, and I haven’t been able to find work since I got fired from the pizza gig. We are both one year away from turning thirty and nothing has changed. KEELO Its cold outside and our electricity will probably be getting shut off soon. Keelo grabs the blunt from Jack’s hand takes a drag. He gets up and walks to the kitchen. He pulls out a container of jelly from the fridge. He starts squeezing the jelly on a slice of bread. KEELO I don’t think you’re ready for this Jelly. I don’t think you’re ready... Keelo grabs an envelope on the table. He opens it and reads it. Chokes on his sandwich. He yells at Jack who is still seated in the living room.

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KEELO I don’t think you need to worry about the electric bill this month. We’re getting evicted. Jack still stares at the TV. JACK At this point, it doesn’t even surprise me. Rent hasn’t been paid in months. We’re losers, man. Accept it. Start packing your shit because we’re going to live with our parents and grandparents at thirty. We tried, man. KEELO We’re out of iced tea. Where the fuck is the iced tea? Can we go buy more? Keelo slams the refrigerator door and kicks it. JACK I drank it. Man I hate these commercials. They always do this shit to me. Its like they’re trying to make you feel bad about sitting on your ass and not feeding fucking children that aren’t yours. Jack tries to change the channel but he pushes the wrong buttons and the TV starts malfunctioning. JACK Lets go get some iced tea. I need to smoke a cigarette anyways. INT. CONVENIENCE STORE - DAY Jack and Keelo hastily walk down the aisle of the convenience store grabbing various snacks and lots of iced tea. KEELO I don’t know how we’re going to do this. I can’t live at home again. My dad is always comparing me to my asshole of a lawyer brother, who makes six figures.

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JACK You’re right. Your brother is kind of an idiot. KEELO I make minimum wage, man. I’m not asking for a drastic life change here, just some financial responsibility so I don’t have to go home and be judged by everyone. JACK I can’t move back in with my grandparents. It didn’t work back then and its sure as fuck not going to work now. I refuse to live in a retirement community again. Do you know how many prescriptions I had to steal before I was OK with watching "Happy Days" every day? You promised me that we’d get rich off our band. I’m not good at anything, man. I’m also getting fat. Pause. KEELO We threw some good parties when we were in school though. Remember that one we had where two people got stabbed? We made four hundred dollars off booze alone that night. JACK We’re not in college anymore. Jack and Keelo go up to the counter to pay for their food. KEELO I know we’re not in college anymore. We need money though and selling drugs isn’t cutting it. What would you think about throwing one last party before getting everything together and finding legit jobs? JACK I don’t want people at my house. We have too much stuff and it would piss our landlord off even more. We don’t have the money or time to (MORE) (CONTINUED)


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JACK (cont’d) rent a venue. I don’t even think we could raise enough money to pay off all our debts. Jack hands his card to the CASHIER. The card gets declined. JACK Try the card one more time. KEELO Good point. We should just throw a party somewhere else, give twenty percent to the owner of the venue and go from there. CASHIER Declined. Keelo grabs cash from his pocket and throws it on the counter. They walk out. EXT. STREET - DAY Keelo and Jack walk down the street drinking iced tea from the can. KEELO I don’t know why I’m even talking about any of this. No one will come to a party with cover for two losers who can’t even pay their rent. Wait. What about that Save The Children shit? JACK What about it? KEELO What if we told people that the profit goes directly to starving kids in third world countries...all the college hipsters would be all over it. Jungle juice for a cause. No excuses. JACK That’s fucked up. But it might actually work...Where are we even going to do this? The idea is useless without a place to throw the party in the first place. I’m (MORE) (CONTINUED)


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JACK (cont’d) not trying to deal with the police either. KEELO Yeah, I know. Keelo and Jack keep walking. They walk past an old, broken down church. They both stop, look at the church. They look each other and smile deviously. INT. CLOUD STATE UNIVERSITY HALLWAY - DAY Keelo and Jack pass out fliers in the hallway. Various students come and grab fliers. JACK You’re not concerned that you’re here at all that you just got fired from this place and you’re standing here passing out party fliers? KEELO No. I used to sell shit to the entire administration. It’s all good. All the fucks I had went out the window this morning when they fired me. More students walk up to them and grab fliers. KEELO 5 dollar kegger. Jungle Juice. Be there. Don’t be an ass, drink to feed some kids in the third world. KEELO’S BOSS, 55, steps outside of her office and picks up a flier from the ground. She walks down the hall and sees Keelo and Jack handing out fliers. She glares. EXT. SKETCHY STREET CORNER - DAY Jack and Keelo pass out fliers to random people on the street. They are surrounded by liquor stores, broken down schools, and a Chicken and Fish restaurant. JACK We’ve been passing out these fucking things for hours. I’m starving. You hungry?

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Keelo shrugs and keeps passing out fliers to high school students and more random people. Jack walks across the street to the Chicken and Fish restaurant. He puts out his cigarette on the concrete and pulls out an empty bag of chips from his pocket. He dumps both in a nearby trash can. A SMALL BOY, 6 stands next to the trash can and pulls out the empty chip bag as soon as Jack disposes of it. JACK What the hell are you doing kid? SMALL BOY I’m so hungry. JACK So go and make your mom or dad make you some mac and cheese or something. What’s wrong with you? SMALL BOY My mom is always gone. When she’s at home she ignores me, smokes crack and watches TV. My grandma was taken to the hospital two days ago. I don’t know who my dad is. I stand out here when something like that happens. There’s always something to eat. I’m starving and I need to find something for my baby sister she’s been laying on the floor crying for three days straight. Jack stares at him. He shakes his head and goes into the restaurant. He comes outside minutes later with two Styrofoam boxes and hands one plus a 5 dollar bill to the Small Boy. JACK I hope you like catfish. The small boy smiles at Jack and starts walking away. He opens the box and walks and eats at the same time. The boy tosses Jack his watch. The watch looks as if it came out of a happy meal. SMALL BOY Grandma says its rare that other people do nice things and if they do we should always give them (MORE) (CONTINUED)


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SMALL BOY (cont’d) something in return. Its from the show "Adventure Time". Jack watches the small boy walk away. He walks back towards Keelo as he puts the watch in his pocket. INT. CRAZY DAD’S CAR - DAY The small boy opens the car door and sits down in the passenger seat next to his CRAZY DAD (30). The car is cluttered with food wrappers, stolen property and boxes of jewelry and more "Adventure Time" watches. SMALL BOY Dad! We got catfish this time. And he gave me a five dollar bill which means we made forty three dollars today! CRAZY DAD Hell yeah lil’ nigga! That’s what the fuck I’m talking about! Small boy and Crazy Dad high five each other and start eating. EXT. SKETCHY STREET CORNER - DAY Jack walks up to Keelo and hands him the box of food. JACK Here. Keelo grabs the box and opens it. He starts eating. KEELO Thanks. This cute girl came up to me with a bunch of her friends, I played up the whole "Save The Children" thing. They seemed really into it. I think a lot of people are going to show up. As long as the cops don’t come we’re golden. We’ll be good. JACK Great.

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KEELO It’s almost six. We need to get this so called jungle juice. We need to go pick up the Keg from Oliver’s place. Jack and Keelo walk into their neighbor, OLIVER’s apartment. The door is open and Oliver, a large black man surrounded by omen’s panties sleeps face-first on his kitchen table. A keg is sitting in a bucket surrounded by ice. Keelo pulls out the keg. Jack steals a bottle of whiskey from the kitchen and they both walk out the door. INT. VACANT CHURCH - NIGHT Jack reaches in his pocket and pulls out a pack of cigarettes and the watch that the small boy gave him. He stares at the watch and looks at Keelo. He hands Keelo a cigarette and a lighter. They smoke. JACK Why did that guy just let us in...I don’t even think he was the pastor. He had a box of Franzia and a suit on...how did he even have the keys? KEELO I don’t know, maybe he used to be the pastor. Who cares. We have approximately two hours before shit starts getting real in here. The two look around the church. Keelo starts setting up the keg and various bottles of liquor on a fold-out card table. Jack stares blankly at the wall. KEELO It ain’t no bar, but I think it will do. Don’t worry about our finances, buddy. Tonight will take care of itself. Do you have a smoke? What? JACK I don’t know man. This kid came up to me today at that Chicken joint. Told me some sob story about his screwed up family. I could kind of relate. I guess there’s always someone out there who has it worse.

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KEELO Where is this coming from dude? JACK I just think we should not do this or give the some of the money to the cause we’re claiming. as fucking stupid as it may sound. I feel bad. Keelo finishes setting up the keg and pours two drinks. He looks at Jack. KEELO What? JACK I know. But do people really give a two shits about feeding the hungry? Or do these pretentious fucking yuppies just want an excuse to get fucked up? KEELO This was your idea. JACK If you think about it, most people only donate to causes because it makes them look better, not because they’re happy about seeing their money go to someone else. Think about it. Keelo passes Jack a cup. KEELO Drink. You’ll feel better. Don’t be nervous about the police, they have other stuff to worry about. Guests show up at the church. A few DJ’s show up and start setting up their equipment at the altar. More guests show up and the church gets increasingly crowded and rowdy. A few smokers loiter next to the large Jesus statue up front and light a blunt. They put the blunt in the Jesus statue’s hand, laugh and take pictures on their phone. Jack walks outside smoking a joint and is lost among a crowd of people smoking cigarettes and drinking. The police pull up.

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Guests run out of the church in a stampede. KEELO’S BOSS stands by the church, crosses her hands and glares. Keelo walks up to Jack waving a wad of cash. KEELO Look at all this shit! We did it...We have so much more than we thought. And you called us losers. The police get out of their car and walk up to Jack and Keelo. Keelo takes off with a crowd of women. The POLICE OFFICER walks up to Jack, who is still holding a joint in his hand. POLICE OFFICER Do you know who is responsible for all of this? JACK I don’t know. POLICE OFFICER What’s that smell? JACK I don’t know. The police officer sniffs then look down at Jack’s hand. Jack is dumbfounded and still holds the burning joint. POLICE OFFICER Is that marijuana? JACK I don’t know. POLICE OFFICER Put your hands up. Jack puts his hands up in defeat. Keelo runs by Jack and watches him get arrested. Keelo runs. He looks back at the church which is damaged even worse than before. INT. JACK AND KEELO’S APARTMENT Jack walks in the apartment in the clothes from the same night before. Keelo sits on the couch flipping through channels on TV. Jack sits on the couch next to Keelo. KEELO Hey, are you OK? I saw what happened but I didn’t want to say (MORE) (CONTINUED)


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KEELO (cont’d) anything because I had all that cash. They let you out? JACK My parents bailed me out. Go figure. I just want to smoke and go to sleep. KEELO Before you crash, look at the kitchen table. Jack walks to the kitchen table and picks up two envelopes. One reads "Rent". He opens it and finds a big wad of cash. Another one reads "For your feed the children shit. Sorry I ran off and you got arrested last night". Jack opens it and smilesJACK You have some dumb ideas, but thanks man. I appreciate it. Keelo hands Jack a blunt. Jack takes it and smokes it. EXT. CHURCH - DAY Several people walk up to the church that has been destroyed. They examine the graffiti and empty liquor bottles left outside. A PASTOR walks up to the building and opens the door. PASTOR What the F-? The large cross statue mounted on top of the church crumbles and falls to the ground. FADE OUT

The Ten Commandments  

A short I wrote about two bums nearly in their thirties who throw a loud, illegal party at an abandoned church.

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