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As far as I can remember, (approximately back to fifth grade) English teachers have always taught that when writing an essay, it needs to be five paragraphs. Five. No more, no less. Poof! There you have it, the perfect organization for an essay of any topic. Well folks, we have been fooled for years. To be successful writers in college, (kind of important) we must learn to abandon this bad habit of limiting ourselves to the standard introduction, three body paragraphs and conclusion setup and learn to broaden the spectrum. Really, the problem starts with the thesis. Most students tend to write what is called a three-pronged thesis. In other words, a claim is made, followed by three supporting statements (prongs) that prove the validity of that claim. The writer then proceeds to spend the entirety of the essay attempting to prove that their claim is correct. Each paragraph repeats the thesis, the only variation being the support to the writer’s claim. Then, to end with a bang, they repeat the thesis in the conclusion, essentially sounding like a

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not fit with the original plan, causing the five-paragraph organization to fall to pieces. This fear is what causes the meat grinder to make its sausages. The writer is so wrapped up in fitting their writing into five paragraphs that the result is a tightly condensed packaging of what could have been a beautifully insightful, juicy steak of writing. When using five-paragraph form, students do not take the time to sit on their thoughts and wait for them to hatch into their full potential. With the lack of effort from the brain, any paper becomes redundantly repetitive and straight up boring to read, unless the art of making words pretty has been mastered. Unfortunately, making the paper pretty to read will not earn a passing grade College level writing is difficult to achieve, even with the abiltiy to seem intelligent on paper. Often, this “intelligence” comes from the wonderful synonym tool in Microsoft Word. Even then, the synonyms do not always have the same intended meaning as the original word. Next time you sit down to write a paper, try not to get caught in the meat grinder; hatch those ideas and let them spread their wings.

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“Gigi’s cupcakes have always been my favorite, my favorite part of the cupcakes is the icing. I love the choices they have, I just wished that they had all of them each day,” junior Katy Simon said.

“The atmosphere is really great. [The Sweet Life’s] icecream is soft and creamy. [My favorite flavor is] chocolate,” senior Carrington Kaiser said.

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What makes a good cupcake a perfect cupcake is moist, fluffy cake with matching icing. The flavors must melt in your mouth and bring the customer back for more. For cupcake shops, service and enviroment make or break one’s experience, people do not want to be unhappy. While visiting a cupcake shop called Gigi’s and a sweet shop called The Sweet Life, I tried cupcakes of different flavors. The Sweet Life has great service and variety. The cashier was very friendly and sweet. She talked with me and she helped me decide which cupcake to get. The cashier at Gigi’s was not very friendly. The Sweet Life’s cupcakes didn’t taste as good as Gigi’s since they did not taste as fresh. But that is not all they sell. The Sweet life offers pies, cakes, chocolates, ice cream, cupcakes and so much more. Gigi’s had around six choices of different kind of cupcakes served different days. The service and the environment may be good, but the taste of the cupcake at The Sweet Life was lacking, even though they also have many other choices, unlike Gigi’s Cupcakes.

Gigi’s variety may not be great, but their cupcakes came out on top. While taking a bite into their White Midnight Magic cupcake I was in heaven. The White Midnight Magic cupcakes had a cream cheese icing with a chocolate cake and chocolate chips on top. I also had a Raspberry Buckle Cupcake and it was splendid. They were so moist and the icing is what topped it off. Gigi’s cupcakes have a mountain of icing on top of them. Each day Gigi’s has different types of cupcakes. On their website they have a calendar to show what day has which flavor. After loving the vibe and decor of the store, The Sweet Life’s cupcakes did not taste very flavorful. With a title like “Sweet Life,” one would think its cupcakes would live up to its name. However, the food was not satisfactory. I tried the Strawberries and Creme and the Cookies n’ Cream cupcakes. They tasted like packaged muffins that you would buy in the junk food aisle. The service and the variety is a very important aspect to any successful restaurant or store. The Sweet Life won in that category. However, it all comes down to the best tasting cupcake. In this case, Gigi’s takes the cake.

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