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Title : Week 16 HW: Revising and Editing

Edit and rewrite the following paragraph. Look for problems in the following:        

verb forms verb + gerund/infinitive word forms passive voice relative clauses articles a/an/the transition words punctuation

Most of us find it difficult to climb even "ordinary" 10,000 foot mountains and it amazes us when we see people ascend mountains such as Mount McKinley, (20,320 feet), Annapurna, (26545) and the tallest of them all Mt. Everest (29,035 ). Its difficult enough to reach these heights if you strong and healthy and haven't handicaps. Can you imagine to do it blind? Eric Weihenmayer can. Eric was born with some sight but legally blind. By the time he was thirteen, he has lost his sight complete. He had graduated from high school as captain of the wrestling team and knew that he wanted to show the world that blind people can do. He had gone to Boston College and a teaching career. He also started mountain climb and since than he has experienced many "firsts." He was a first blind person to walk the Inca trail to Machu Picchu, a first to reach a summit of Mt. McKinley in Alaska and, in 2001, he became the first blind person to scale Mt. Everest.


The answer: …..Most of us find it difficult to climb even "ordinary" 10,000 foot mountains and it amazes us, when we saw people ascend mountains, such as Mount McKinley, (20.320 feet) Annapurna (26545), and the tallest of them all Mt. Everest (29,035 ) it's difficult enough to reach these heights if you strong and healthy and haven't handicaps can you imagine to do it blind. Eric weihenmayer can. Eric was born with some sight but legally blind by the time, he was thirteen, he has lost his sight complete, he has graduated from high school as captain of the wrestling team and knew that he wanted to show the world, that blind people can do, he also started mountain climb and since then he has experienced many "firsts", he was a first blind person to walk the Inca trail to Machu Picchu a first to reach a summit of Mr. McKinley in Alaska and, in 2001 he became the first blind person to scale Mt. Everest. ‫ــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــــ‬

Name: Mahfouz Al-Ghamdi Date: Jan 24, 2012


Assignment 1 for week 16